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Some film companies spend millions of dollars on the production of a single movie. Is it necessary to spend a lot of money to make a good movie? What factors contribute to the success of a movie? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or Experience.

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21st
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 century when entertainment in
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hight
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high
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 level many
film
 companies spend
much
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a lot of
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 money on the shooting of a single
films
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film
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. Some people think that they should spend a million
of
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dollars to
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the making
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making
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make
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 of
good
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a good
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movie
.
However
, there are some factors which help and contribute to
the
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 successful
movie
.
First
 of
all
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am
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agree with
first
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 statement that,
this
 is should spend
a
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much money to make a
hight
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high
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 quality and interesting
movie
. Because if you shoot a
film
to
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for
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 sales and to
realization
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realise
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 to cinemas for viewers you must spend
maximum
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the maximum
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 if
your
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you
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 saving. For breathtaking and quality
film
 it needed
a luxury locations
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a luxury location
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, famous and popular
actors
 and experienced staff.
For
example
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 Paramount Pictures, Walt Disney Studios, Warner Brothers, Miramax, 20th Century Fox and others spend thousands of dollars
to
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on
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production
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the production
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 of
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the film
a film
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film
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films
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.
Accordingly
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 the fees
from
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for
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 the films are different and always more than the costs themselves.
On the other hand
 most part of
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the world
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world
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 citizens needed to see
a Hollywood stars
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Hollywood stars
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 on the screen of tv and cinemas. But only expensive
actors
 do not give
the
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apply
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hight
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high
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 popularity and much fees
from
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for
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 the
film
. The main factors which contribute
in
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to
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 success
is
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are
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 script and storyline.
For example
 when I want to go to
cinema
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the cinema
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,
firstly
 I search the teaser. After I decided
should
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whether should
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 I go or not. In some ways
main
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the main
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 part of
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the worlds
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worlds
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world's
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 residents solved to
went
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go
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 by posters with popular
actors
. But for me more exciting watching
to
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new faces and
not so popular
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not-so-popular
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actors
 who have talent. In my own
opinion
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 it should find young stars
instead
 of spending money
to
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on
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 famous people. And choose not typical screenplays like everyone else. I advised attention to unusual stories
instead
 of drama, fantasy and action
movie
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movies
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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