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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#people #advertisements #products #lives #support
Advertising nowadays always
find
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 a way to pop up everywhere, be it in the middle of photography media socials, video blogs, and even car window. It could be so tempting that
people
 can actually buy the items they do not really need in the
first
 place. Yet sometimes,
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advertisement
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advertisements
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 can be
helping
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through
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 introducing us to certain helpful things that exist in the market.
However
, I personally agree with the latter statement because
people
 now become consumptive to the point they are willing to borrow some money from agents even if they have to pay it back more.
First
 of all, with the
transendence
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transcendence
 usage of
internet
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the internet
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, it can be a powerful platform to air the advertisement effectively. It
also
 comes
with
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 a creative way,
for example
like
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hiring Korean Popstar as their model for the items that are not essential in our life and offering souvenirs or freebies. That way,
people
 are interested to buy the items because they want to collect the freebies
instead
 of really using or consuming the purchased
item
.
Second
 of all,
people
 can actually do
an
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easy research to find the
item
 that can improve their lives. The
existance
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existence
 of
internet
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the internet
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 algorithm is really handy since it can help to give us other
item
 recommendations based on the
keywod
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keyword
keywords
 we searched for. We can compare the function and the price easily so that we can decide which
item
 will be the perfect one to be checked out. To sum up, I think
people
 should be smarter to prioritise which product they really need the most and which one is not on the top
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.
This
 will prevent them from spending their money on
less
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 important
item
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