Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Advertising nowadays always
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a way to pop up everywhere, be it in the middle of photography media socials, video blogs, and even car window. It could be so tempting that
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can actually buy the items they do not really need in the
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place. Yet sometimes,
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advertisement
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can be
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introducing us to certain helpful things that exist in the market.
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, I personally agree with the latter statement because
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now become consumptive to the point they are willing to borrow some money from agents even if they have to pay it back more.
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of all, with the
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transcendence
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, it can be a powerful platform to air the advertisement effectively. It
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hiring Korean Popstar as their model for the items that are not essential in our life and offering souvenirs or freebies. That way,
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are interested to buy the items because they want to collect the freebies
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of really using or consuming the purchased
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of all,
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can actually do
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easy research to find the
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that can improve their lives. The
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algorithm is really handy since it can help to give us other
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recommendations based on the
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keyword
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we searched for. We can compare the function and the price easily so that we can decide which
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will be the perfect one to be checked out. To sum up, I think
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should be smarter to prioritise which product they really need the most and which one is not on the top
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will prevent them from spending their money on
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