It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children.

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It is imperative for

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to build morality at a young age.

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start learning to distinguish between right and wrong from childhood which helps them to develop as an adult with high values. I agree that punishment is an important part of parenting to achieve

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like to point out and talk about the kind of punishment which plays a significant role in the personality development of the

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. In earlier times, punishment primarily refers to scolding or beating with a ruler.

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, I strongly disregard

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kind of treatment as a part of teaching

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righteous values. To illustrate my point, if you beat your

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, the

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may develop low self-esteem and

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of confidence as an adult.

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it does not mean we have to neglect the wrong behaviour of the

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. We all have to understand the importance of values in the lives of our

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adopt parenting strategies which

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not possess any negative consequences. One

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way to deal with

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is the idea of negative reinforcement. So, in order to make the

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understand the value of right and wrong, we deprive them of the reward which was provided

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displaying a desirable

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, if a

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is given 15 mins extra play time whenever the

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right behaviour. But,

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extra play time will be taken off on the days when he/she is misbehaving.

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will be naturally motivated towards good conduct and will be discouraged

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, I feel that schools play a pivotal role in shaping the moral character of their students.

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, parents should continue to support

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back at home.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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4 paragraphs

314 words

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