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These days, people work in more than one job, and often change career several times during their life. Do advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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The frequent career change has always been subjected to discussion and is constantly debated.
However
, owing to modern society there are several
job
 changes which happen in a career span particularly, in private enterprises. In
this
 essay, we shall try to substantially look at the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 trend.
Firstly
, to speak of the advantages of
this
 tendency, it leads to an increasingly incremental income for the individual.
Secondly
, working in different organisations enhances the adaptability, skill and capability of an individual.
Furthermore
, it can be stated that with little
job
 security prevalent in the present scenario, it is an obvious strategy.
Additionally
, it helps newer organisations particularly to establish themselves in the marketplace. To cite an example it was shown that employees in India gained 15% incrementally, owing to
job
 switches.
In contrast
,it can be stated that frequent transitions in employment subsequentially
affects
Change the verb form
affect
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job
 stability .
Although
 it may lead to higher potential remuneration, the lure makes employees mentally more unstable . Subsequentially, owing to frequent changes , the employee becomes unemployable. Clearly, it is a loss proposition for the employer who has invested considerably, in training the resource.
Subsequently
, the loss of employees translates into an economic slide for the organisation.
For example
 loss of a core employee led to a 3% value erosion in stock exchange unlisted companies. Conclusively, it can be said that owing to economic traits, the advantages clearly outweigh the disadvantages. On an individual ,level it is economically beneficial .
Nevertheless
, it is specifically dependent on the economic system to which one is exposed .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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