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After being punished, many criminals continue to commit crimes. Why do some people commit crimes even after having been punished? What measures can be taken to tackle this problem.

#criminals #crimes #people #measures
The problem of
offenders
 frequently doing crimes after punishment which was always debatable and has now become more controversial. The population is
fasicanted
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fascinated
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offenders
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who
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they
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reattempt crimes. The substantial influence of
this
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controversy over the potential impact in recent years. In my, opinion repeated crime by
criminals
 is a great dilemma. There are myriads of reasons which will
further
 explain why few individuals
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same
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 cruelty again and again after punishment.
Although
, the most preponderant fact is that flexible laws which can provide instant bail to
criminals
. Another pivotal aspect is that corruption in courts
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primary
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 reason owing to affluent
criminals
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 whole employees
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for instance
 the police Man, judges, and, opposition lawyers. Moving
further
, it is pertinent to mention that
offenders
 want to be famous in
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 that's why they
doing
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 cruelty again and again because these kinds of news
published
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 in
main
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 edition.
Similarly
, television and,
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the internet
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 represent telecast of
this
 crime on tv, smartphones, and, computers.
Hence
, it is apparent that
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 is a global threat. There are
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colossal
 ways and means that can be taken to combat
this
 problem.
Although
, the most alarming one is the government should
be
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make
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strict
stricts
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strict
 and mighty rules which can
decreasing
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th
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the
 rates of
this
 trend. Another undoubted solution to counter
this
 problem is
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criminals
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criminals'
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 weekend routine check-ups will
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 as soon as possible, doctor may check their mental health rather than physical health due to what kind of phycology is stand in their minds.
Furthermore
, the higher authorities provide more power to
police
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 which can find
a
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 adequate quick fix
of
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this
dillemma
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dilemma
.
Similarly
, punishment will be modified into more challenging ways
in other words
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life sentence
, shoot and side, and, hanging.
Thus
, if
above
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 steps are taken appropriately ,
this
 affair may find
their
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 quick fix. To
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recapitulate
, repeated crime ratio by
offenders
 can be solved if the above measures are taken or to
recaptiulate
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recapitulate
, it is stated that the government and pupils both put their best foot forward together to curb
this
 menace.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rehabilitation
  • reintegration
  • recidivism
  • underlying issues
  • support systems
  • criminal networks
  • peer pressure
  • barriers
  • psychological assessment
  • addiction treatment
  • economic factors
  • sentencing
  • data analysis
  • community-based programs
  • restorative justice
  • vocational training
  • social inequalities
  • preventive measures
  • post-release
  • crime cycle
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