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Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why.

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Some
people
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 like to live in the same house,
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 the same job and habits all their lives.
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, others aspire to
changes
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 and new
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experience
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. Personally, for
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several reasons, which I will explain
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, I prefer the
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 approach to
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 of all,
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 in one's
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 bring many benefits. One tries new things,
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 new knowledge and
experience
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. I think it is great because without
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life
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 becomes boring. I always try to make
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 in my
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.
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, when I feel that my
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 is boring I do not feel well about it. I feel like I spent those days for nothing. I did not do anything
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, I learnt nothing interesting and I just wasted my time.
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 of all,
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 need
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.
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, we need obstacles to overcome and reach our goals. I believe that
changes
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 make us stronger, more persistent, more self-confident, and more patient.
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, I feel that all
people
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 who succeeded in
life
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 like
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 and new
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experience
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experiences
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 because it is impossible to be the best
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 some field without perfecting the present knowledge and
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gaining
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experience
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experiences
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.
People
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 catch every opportunity to learn more and change their
life
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 for the best.
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 the other side,
people
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 who like their lives to stay the same are very permanent. They have the same job all their
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, the same habits, the same
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weekends
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 and even the same years in
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and years
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 out. I think it is boring. What will they tell their children about their lives? What kind of contribution will they make
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society? I think
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people
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 are just afraid of
changes
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. I think curiosity and aspiration
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the
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new
experience
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 are two of the main reasons
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 human evolution.
People
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 always wanted to break limits and gain more knowledge and
experience
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. So,
people
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 who enjoy change are the engine of human development.
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