Some people believe women are better leaders than men. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Some people believe
women
are better
leaders
than
men
, in my
opinion
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i
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disagree because sometimes
women
can be
leaders
but
men
are more of
dominant
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the dominant
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gender. To start with,
women
are less of an ambitious gender , they
tend
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be more on the soft side of things .
On the other hand
,
men
are
leaders
they are made to lead the pack like most of the animals in the world none of the pack
leaders
are female 99
percent
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of them are male and
that is
just a proven fact.
Secondly
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women
tend to see the bad side of things rather than the good side ,
this
a
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very important part that males don't have ,
men
tend to joke around if something bad just to lighten up the mood. To end things off
i
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I
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would like to add some personal experiences that as a man and a leader
i
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I
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have dealt through it and how
a
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women
a woman
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women
would deal
in
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my situation . A long time ago
me
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I
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and my friends went on a hiking trip and we were faced
by
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with
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a dead end which was the end of the cliff, and we were lost so
i
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I
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used my compose and tracked my trail to find the car and
that is
the
leaders
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leader's
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role , but if
a
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a woman
women
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women
tried to do it , it would be hell because as a study is shown the
women
have a better long term memory but a shorter term memory than
men
. To sum up ,
men
are a better
leader
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and it is proven by science and even the entire world
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  • decision-making
  • problem-solving
  • perspectives
  • compassionate
  • empathetic
  • supportive work environment
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