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The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashions in clothes and other consumer goods. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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In
this
 modern era, everyone wants to look good and try to be the best
hence
majority
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 of them follow
latest
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the latest
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trend
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trends
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.
Such
 as distressed
jeans
 and Alkaline
water
. I strongly agree that because of the popularity of Fashion human beings
copy
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 each other. Let us briefly analyse my point.
To begin
 with, distressed
jeans
 is now become very popular
in
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 men and women because of
its
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their
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 look. Earlier it was a time when very few teenagers wear
this
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these
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 ripped
jeans
in
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at
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 parties but now boys and girls both wear
such
type
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types
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 of bottom wears as their regular outfits. They believe that if they will not wear the trending clothes
then
 others think they are not cool. Adding to my
next
 point, human beings
tries
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 to
copy
 others
on
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in
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 their food and drinking style . Nowadays people drink
alkaline
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more alkaline
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water
 than other
water
 as tap
water
 and mineral
water
. alkaline
water
 has
high
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a high
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 pH level which helps in pro ageing and weight
loos
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loss
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 activities
hence
 most
celebraties
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celebrities
 use
this
water
 only and other people
follows
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follow
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 them because they think
celebraties
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celebrities
 are their idol and if they
copy
 them
then
 only they become classy All and all to conclude my point, it is human tendency to
copy
 either others or any
celebraties
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celebrities
 to
be look
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look
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 cool and classy in their surroundings
hence
 they follow
latest
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the latest
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 trends of clothes like ripped
jeans
 or food and drink habitat like alkaline
water
.
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