In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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Nowadays, it is undeniable that the
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of unemployed people
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rapidly even if they are fully qualified.
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is because of the pandemic covid 19 and the high
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of universities which were graduating
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more and more every year.
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causes and how to tackle
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with, Covid 19 was the major problem a
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years ago that made the vast majority of people around the world
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their
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and fresh graduated
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cannot be accepted to work in a company or government.
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, many highly qualified
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become jobless. To tackle
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problem,
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governments should bring in investors and open job
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to decrease the
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of unemployment.
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, the
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of graduate
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in Universities has increased multiple times if we compare it to a couple
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ago.
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,
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at the university are only prepared to learn knowledge
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connected to their major or related to their subject. The solution to
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issue is to change the curriculum into practical subjects so the
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can be well-prepared to solve the problems that societies experience.
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, etc. All in all, the authorities and private sectors need to gain opportunities at work;
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, the universities need to encourage
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, not only to be civil servants but
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to be entrepreneurs. By doing
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the problem can be solved.
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