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Some People believe that childhood is the best stage of happiness. While others believe that a person can enjoy more happiness in other stages of life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
argued
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 that the early years are the best stage of
life
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.
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, others believe that one can enjoy more in other stages of
life
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. In my opinion,
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 in childhood there are fewer responsibilities, I believe that the other stages of
life
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 are filled with happiness as
people
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 become independent. On the one hand, many say that childhood is the best period of
life
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 because of fewer responsibilities.
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 stage is considered a golden phase of one's
life
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.
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, children are not enough mature in childhood, the only things they need to do
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 just do academics
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spend
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 with their friends and
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also
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enjoy their hobbies. They do not need to be
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 about serious problems and financial issues as their parents fulfil all their desires.
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, it is a carefree period with no social pressure just pure freedom.
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, some argue that the teenage years are the best
time
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 in most
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's
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life
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. In
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 era, they have the happiest dates and enjoy college
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, explore new places with friends and
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 enjoy being stressed.
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 to that, some
people
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 start earning money, settling
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 their
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life
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lives
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, and
bear them
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 all expenses which leads them to live the
life
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 they want. To elaborate , individuals make lifelong relationships and share their happiness with loved ones
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 as at
wedding
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weddings
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 and the birth of a child and many more.
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, many
people
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take
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 a lot of stress about their academics and
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 enjoy that stressful
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. In conclusion,
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 infancy is a carefree period with no social pressure, I believe that young age is the best
time
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 of
life
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 as it gives us more happiness
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 as long relationships, weddings and college days.
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