Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbles and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this Information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are basically two prospects when we are talking about sharing
personal
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the personal
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record
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with organizations when applying for work. On one side, some believe it is valuable for
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the company
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company
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companies
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to know more about their employees and see if they are
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fit in their work culture. On the other side, It is seen as
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and bad practice as it could lead to
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range of issues and problems for
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group
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of individuals. Going forward, we will be discussing both sides and their pros and cons with my personal
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.
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and foremost, Employers try to create
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working environment for their employees. Hobbies or other relevant characteristics could help understand individual
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at work.
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, applicants who love to draw could be the best fit for jobs with
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for relevant skills. It could help companies avoid
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and expensive process of
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of
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ineligible applicants. Relatively, corporations can
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use
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information to segregate certain individuals on basis of their hobbies. It could be easy to jump to a conclusion that the employee
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addicted to their part-time habits. These kinds of policies could automatically cancel
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applications
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without fairly considering
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range like and dislikes.
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, if somebody loves listening
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could be easily characterized as unprofessional. In my opinion, information with personal details should remain hidden until the company has done its extensive review of the applicant.
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kind of information should be seen as
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factor and must never come close to
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team.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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