According to most people, it is actually impossible to achieve work-life balance during employment. Do you agree with this statement?

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Getting employed by all the members of the family has become essential in today’s challenging world. It is far more than possible to have a balance between work and

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. I completely agree that it is very challenging to manage both work and

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, being salaried is very important. Nowadays, families are neutral due to which all the responsibilities need to be taken up by ourselves. Earlier days had elders who would look upon the household activities which gave us a lot of peace and balance in our lives.

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, today we are alone, have to manage our office pressure, return home and look after the household duties and children. Referring to the high stress at work, extended working hours, and multiple responsibilities at the office our energy is drained by end of the day.

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, without any support in our personal

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we tend to lose our balance in managing both our personal

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and professional

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. We cannot witness any time for ourselves. Post achieving results at the office, managing our personal

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becomes sick and we tend to give up on our personal

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which results in an imbalance.

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, employment is very necessary. We should learn to figure out our strengths and weaknesses and maintain our personal and professional

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for betterment.

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, on

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note, I agree that maintaining personal

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while being employed is impractical.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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235 words

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