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Some people think that having a set retirement age for everybody regardless is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at easy age.Do you agree or disagree. Which type of workers do you think should be benefit for early retirement. Give reason and example.

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age
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 and
retirement
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age
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 are long-debated issues in our society, some
people
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 believe that having a fixed
age
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 for
retirement
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 on all levels of society is an absurd idea.
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, it has been suggested that some certain professions should receive their
retirement
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pensions
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 at a younger
age
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. in
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 essay, I will explain why different
people
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 should be treated in a biased manner rather than equally when it comes to when they should receive their
retirement
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pensions
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. To proceed
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,
people
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 in our society should be treated differently according to their profession and their level of expertise. it's morally wrong that a doctor who spent his whole life working hard and saving countless lives is not equal to a waiter or barber. it's evident that we can't set a
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age
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 for both.
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, both shouldn't receive equal
pensions
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. according to a survey conducted at the University of Boston, it reveals that 80% of
people
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 think that fixed
retirement
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age
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 for all is unjust and morally wrong. especially doctors and teachers.
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, many would
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 agree that doctors and teachers should not only receive
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 but
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 gain subsidies and longer holidays as a reward for their hard
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 and dedication.
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, some
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 would suggest that we should
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 consider gender when it comes to
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age
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. usually, men are physically stronger than women and
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 able to
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 at an older
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 whereas women are less likely to
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 after the
age
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 of 60 or during pregnancy. to sum up, in my opinion, the government should set a
retirement
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age
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 carefully because it would deny
people
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 their well-earned reward and respect.
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