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the results of a survey on four different reasons (employment, study, family/friends, adventure) why people moved in to the capital city of a country from 2000 to 2015.

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employment
, study, family/friends, adventure) why
people
 moved
in to
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 the capital
city
 of a country from 2000 to 2015. Overall, all reasons except
employment
has
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have
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 an increasing pattern throughout the years while
people
 moving to
city
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the city
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 seeking
employment
has
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have
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 drastically reduced from 2010. It is evident that there is a lesser population interested in
adventure
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the adventure
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 as the
amount
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 of
people
 (approximately 1000) has been on
mildly
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 uprising trend. In 2005,
although
 there is a
two fold
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 increase in
people
 travelling into the
city
 because of their friends/family, later it plateaued over the
next
 five years. In comparison to 2000, in 2015
people
 moving into the
city
 for studies
has
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sky rocketed
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. By 2015, it has hit
it’s
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its
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 highest number of
people
 (little less than 9000) and that same amount of
people
has
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 come into cities seeking jobs. The population looking for
employment
has
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gradually increased
in
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between 2000 to 2005 and another mild increase in the
next
 five years until it took a hit
on
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in
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 2010.
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