You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: Give details of your study plans Explain why you want to get a part-time job Suggest how your friend could help you find a job Please try to write at least 150 words.

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Dear Paul, I'm writing to ask for a favour from you to know regarding the availability of part-time jobs in Sydney as you're

residing

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in Sydney for a long time. Let me tell you my study plan in more detail. I'

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been offered a half-paid scholarship to study master's of Civil Engineering by the University of Sydney for the January intake of 2023. I'

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received the subject timetable and according to it, I'll have lectures

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each weekday for 12 weeks from 9.00 am to 4.00 pm.

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, I'll only have weekends to attend else. It clearly points out that's gonna be a hectic schedule for me. Let me explain why I need a part-time job. You know that I'

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been offered a half-paid scholarship and I need to earn and pay the rest of it. I haven't saved that sum of money that I can put up with, and I'm not gonna worry my parents as I wanna be independent as you. So, the best way to settle it'd be

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up part-time jobs on weekends. Since

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you'

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been living for so long and as per the previous conversation

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regarding the number of connections in different jobs you're having, I suppose you might have a big chance of finding me a part-time job. I am willing to do janitorial work, café

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and any other part work as well. Please let me know. Your friend, Jay.

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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

238 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Educational aspirations
Work experience
Financial independence
Resume (or CV)
Local job market
International student
Legal requirements
Student work permit
Employment trends
Time management
Networking
A part-time position
Balance studies and work
Job hunting strategies

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The best for the government to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport per day, 7 day a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.

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Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?