The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal?

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people

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, the trend of legalizing gay

marriage

has adverse effects on

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society

, but others think that it seems to be a natural trend and right for

people

to have

this

type of

marriage

. I believe that gay

marriage

should be legal for the following reasons. On one hand, in recent years,

people

became

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to accept homosexual

couples

because of cultural developments,

people

start to get more information from foreign countries that gay

couples

are legally allowed to get married and adopt children to build their

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. In previous centuries when

people

were less open-minded, same

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couples

were recognized as

people

with psychological problems (disorders) and they were sent to psych wards;

therefore

, the experts were conducting research and studies to prove that homosexuality is not a disease and researches were proving

people

that it is not a disease.

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believe that it is the wrong decision to let same-sex

couples

get married. Especially in some religions, it is important to keep to natural rules which state that a

marriage

should be between a man and a woman.

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, I believe it is a big step for

society

to accept gay

couples

. It

already

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a shock for

people

when they figure out their sexual orientation, and it is

also

difficult to find someone to be with. Even though gay

couples

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society

is not accepting,

then

they have to face the disapproval of

people

around them which creates a difficult situation to be in.

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been together, they have to deal with the whole

society

. It is

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situation. In conclusion, I believe it is a societal development to legalize same-sex

marriage

because it helps

people

cherish their happiness and it makes

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society

become more balanced (fairer) because everyone has the right to get married.

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