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The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal?

#marriage #people #trend #effects #society #right #type
In some
people
's
mind
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, the trend of legalizing gay
marriage
 has adverse effects on
the
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society
, but others think that it seems to be a natural trend and right for
people
 to have
this
 type of
marriage
. I believe that gay
marriage
 should be legal for the following reasons. On one hand, in recent years,
people
 became
open minded
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 to accept homosexual
couples
 because of cultural developments,
people
 start to get more information from foreign countries that gay
couples
 are legally allowed to get married and adopt children to build their
family
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. In previous centuries when
people
 were less open-minded, same
genders'
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couples
 were recognized as
people
 with psychological problems (disorders) and they were sent to psych wards;
therefore
, the experts were conducting research and studies to prove that homosexuality is not a disease and researches were proving
people
 that it is not a disease.
On the other hand
, most
of
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people
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 believe that it is the wrong decision to let same-sex
couples
 get married. Especially in some religions, it is important to keep to natural rules which state that a
marriage
 should be between a man and a woman.
In contrast
, I believe it is a big step for
society
 to accept gay
couples
. It
already
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 a shock for
people
 when they figure out their sexual orientation, and it is
also
 difficult to find someone to be with. Even though gay
couples
 can be together
,
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 if
the
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society
 is not accepting,
then
 they have to face the disapproval of
people
 around them which creates a difficult situation to be in.
have
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 been together, they have to deal with the whole
society
. It is
tough
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 situation. In conclusion, I believe it is a societal development to legalize same-sex
marriage
 because it helps
people
 cherish their happiness and it makes
the
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society
 become more balanced (fairer) because everyone has the right to get married.
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