Parents should encourage children to spend a list time in studies and more time in physics activities do you agree

In
this
modern epoch,
children
are becoming more and more introverted the past.
However
, some masses proclaim that
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parents
should give information and encouragement to their offspring to spend their
time
in outdoor
activities
rather than doing academic work. I have elaborate concur side in forthcoming paragraphs To comment with agreement side of
this
phenomenon.
First
and foremost, students who are below 10 years, they do not have the ability for what think is good and wrong for them.
Additionally
, at starting age
children
, they are mostly dependent on their
parents
. And
children
follow their
parents
also
. So, so
children
are becoming cause potatoes if their
parents
do not encourage them to spend quality
time
doing outdoor
activities
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And, it occurs many constitutions like, like it affects on
children
mind and
also
effect on their nature and
also
children
can be introvert for their whole
life
.
Furthermore
, only doing
study
can be not beneficial for any child
for instance
one child who only concentrates on
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study
for the whole
time
. So, they cannot able to learn social skills and are not able to brief knowledge about the world and other people's nature and it can take many causes in
children
's future
life
-like, he or she could not able to communicate with others and could not have sufficient to make a relationship with other
Secondly
, not only studying but
also
a good physical body is important for living the good
life
. In another word, sitting in one place for the long term causes many diseases like obesity and diabetes. And, by doing physical
children
can able to live
life
with the out any physical issues.
For example
,
children
who
doing
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bought
study
and Outer
activities
, or cannot only overcome
this
stress related to their studies but
also
build strong bodies through some outdoor
activities
like
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swimming cycling and many other outdoor games.
Furthermore
, childhood is one
time
when
children
have
time
to do everything and if their
parents
put pressure on their offspring for doing only
study
, the
children
cannot live there Sheel hood as well as other
children
who spend
time
in physical
activities
with
study
conclusion, I fully support the view that
children
should be encouraged by their
parents
to
children
good body strength and good
life
in childhood without any tension of
study
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