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University and college are now offering qualifications through distance leaving from the internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

#university #college #qualifications #distance #internet #teachers #classroom #development
Nowadays due to the COVID-19
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pandemic
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students
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 to take
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online lessons. In my
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, I believe
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disadvantage. The main advantage I think would be the cost saving. It's been noted that the inflation rate is kind of out of control in some countries, which makes
students
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apartment
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. Another advantage is that there would be no space limitations for
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class
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 which
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might give more
students
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 campus, one classroom could only
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 about 30~40
students
, but in the online class,
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technique
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, even more than 300
students
 would not be a problem. Of course, the online course does some
disvantages
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disadvantages
 like
students
 may hard to
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concentrate
 or some lessons may
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hands on
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 lab experience which is hard to
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 with
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 distance class. In short, there are more positive aspects of online courses than
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negitive
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negative
 ones.
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