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Traffic congestion is becoming a huge problem for many major cities. Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce traffic in big cities.

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a generation ago,
people
 were moved easily from one to another place without facing any
traffic
.
However
, major cities are now seeing a massive amount of problems
due to
 the rapid increase in
cars
.
This
 essay will look at the core reasons for
this
 and propose some solid solutions. One of the main causes of the problems is that the number of main
roads
 is quite low. By
this
, I mean
roads
 are few, and the buses and
cars
 have to choose that route to go to their destinations.
For example
, public buses, tourist buses, and private
cars
 mainly have to use highway
roads
, so if it is few,
traffic
 can not be controlled properly,
This
 solution is to build alternative
roads
 that can be used daily by city residents. Another problem is that the environment is getting worse.
this
 is to say
people
 are ignoring the disaster that occurs from pollution every year by releasing bad emissions. To tackle
this
 issue, transportation companies have to minimize their number of transportation services. A third issue of the problem is that
tourists place
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is
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 facing a lower amount of visitors. To be more precise, in some poor countries where monuments are found, their
traffic
 system is not so good, and their transportation doesn't follow the driving rules.
As a result
, overseas
people
 are now avoiding that type of country, and the GDP will not increase. The way forward could be to spread the importance of rules and regulations for driving
cars
 and take some strict action against them.
To sum up
, increasing
traffic
 can diminish the beauty of nature,
due to
 reasons
such
 as the rising number of
cars
, unskilled drivers, and so on. My view is that the
more
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 responsibility for solving the problem lies with the
people
 and the
people
 living
countries
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in the country's
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 government's hands by taking some necessary developments.
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