The expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The bar chart shows levels of expenditures on a set of consumer goods in 2010 between the countries:
France
and
UK
. The products under consideration are cars, computers, books, perfume and
camera
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cameras
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. Among the major part of comparisons of each item between
two
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the two
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countries,
UK
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the UK
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takes a significant lead in consumption. It utilized around 50 thousand cars more than
France
did. Another dominance of
UK
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the UK
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happened with books and cameras on approximately 100 and 200
thousands
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thousand
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respectively.
Moreover
, the
amount
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number
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of cameras was more than twice as much as it was in
France
at
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in
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2010. It experienced a sharp increase of 120
percents
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per cent
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comparing
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compared
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to its arrival.
Nonetheless
,
France
wasn’t after
UK
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the UK
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in everything. It consumed computers more than
UK
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the UK
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on slightly more than 20
thousands
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thousand
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item which was slightly more than 6%.
Conversely
, the difference between
numbers
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the numbers
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of perfumes became much more obvious and it
stated
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started
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around 60
thousands
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thousand
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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