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The table details
age
 demographics and their relation to the deficit in three
states
 in the United
States
 of America. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that there are more young individuals in Utah, while for those over 60 starvation is more common in
California
 and especially
Florida
. Average incomes are generally highest in
California
 and
Florida
 and the largest proportion of total people in scarcity is highest in
California
, followed by
Florida
, and
lastly
 Utah. In
California
, 16% of all
states
 are under the official famine line, with 17% of all nations under 18 years old and 13% over 60. These figures are broadly similar to
Florida
 where 12% of the population is in underdevelopment (16% of the total society under the
age
 of 18 and a notable 23% over 60). In terms of average income,
California
 was recorded at $23,000 and
Florida
 was slightly lower at $22,000. The figures in Utah are markedly different as only 9% of districts are considered poor. Of the total population
age
 demographics, 28% are under the
age
 of 18 but just 8% are elderly individuals.
Additionally
, average earnings are lower than the other two
states
 at just $17,000.
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