It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics.

In today's perpetually transforming epoch , studying
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all subjects
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very necessary for any individual's life .As a consequence, it opined by a few
people
that it is more beneficial for learners to study art as well as
literature
instead
of
maths
and
science
.I disagree to
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extent with
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notation and , I have given my reasons along with suitable justifications
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the impending subdivisions. Commencing with the disagreement side ,
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first
and foremost, by learning
maths
and
science
on account of art and
literature
students
become
contributing
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member
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members
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of
the
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society
. To be specific , by learning
maths
and
science
,one can become
doctor
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or
scientist
and
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the
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society
by checking
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and
diagnosing diseases, which
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possible in arts and
literature
. What is more ,
scientist
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the scientist
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is contributing member of
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society
.
Furthermore
,
by
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different discoveries of
scientist
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life has been changed
to
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many
people
.
For instance
:- during corona
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pandemic
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time , by means of
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prescribed pills and vaccines which has been discovered by
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a scientist
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scientist
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, life can be saved
of
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many
people
.
Additionally
, by learning
maths
and
science
people
can enhance their
creativity
and thinking ability
as
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for learning pragmatic
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students
need to get practical
knowledge
, in which ,
students
use their own thinking ability, whereas
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in
history
and
literature
subject ,
students
have to read
theoritical
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theoretical
knowledge
.
Furthermore
, by means of
creativity
, learners can get
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name and fame in the world .
For example
, Charlie Chaplin
who
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is
the
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famous funny actor .by enhancing his
creativity
now he is amusing the world. To commence with the
disagreementside
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disagreement side
disagreement aside
,
history
gives
knowledge
about our forefathers and
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.
Furthermore
,
history
is
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root cause of every
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.To
examplify
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, if one
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to know
about
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an information
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about
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the birth
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birth place
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, he /she should
to
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learn
history
as it reveals
or
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data from primitive men to
contemporary
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era Apart from that , it gives information from
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stone-age
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to
modern
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era which cannot be learnt by
maths
and
science
. To conclude, by learning
maths
and
science
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become
contributing
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member
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members
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of
the
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society
and they can enhance
then
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knowledge
and
creativity
.
On the other hand
, by learning
history
and
literature
, one can get information about
an
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ancient times.
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