Today much of the food people ear gets transported from farms that are thousands of miles away. Some people believe it would be better for the environment and the economy if people only consumed food produced by local farmers. Would the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nutrition plays a pivotal role
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the survival of living beings. Nowadays
people
consume
food
that is
brought from farms that are millions of miles away, but some
people
have
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that it would be convenient for the atmosphere and the economy if individuals only eat
food
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by
local
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agriculturist
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. I do not fully agree with the above statement and my
view points
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will be shed light
on
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the subsequent segments. To initiate with, I would like to say that in some land which is used for agriculture purposes, the quality of soil is not good enough to produce
high quality
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food
.
Moreover
, if the land is not fertile enough, it increases the use of artificial fertilizers in order to make
soil
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fertile that
as a result
,
make
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food
inorganic.
therefore
, it will
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immunity of a person who consumes it. There was
a recent news
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popped up on
international
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media channel that most of the
people
residing in
U.S.A
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had suffered from immunity disorders after eating
food
regularly which were grown in their local surroundings for one year. The reason was the deficiency of natural minerals in
soil
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the soil
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that
is require
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for particular
food
. So, it would be
great
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idea if we grow particular
food
on
the
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land which provides suitable conditions
to
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it whether we have to bear the
expensive
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of its transportation from far away places. On the flip side,
i
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would say carrying
food
from far away places will
result
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increase in
prices
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the prices
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of certain
food
commodities due to the expense of fuel used in transportation.
As a result
, it will create an unnecessary burden
into
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the pockets of
general
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public.
Furthermore
,it will create noise and air pollution in the form of heavy vehicles that are used in their delivery
such
as
lorry
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,
trucks
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and trucks
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.These heavy vehicles emit harmful gases and produce heavy sounds with
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horns. To conclude,
people
say that
food
delivery from far places
pollute
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environment
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which is a burning
issues
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today.But according to my
perspective
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there
is
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many other vital points that
needs
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to be taken into consideration that why we should bring
food
from other farms like health issues
facing
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faced
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by
people
who eat
food
from local farms.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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