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In many large cities some people waste hours of their time everyday because of traffic jams on the road. What do you think are the causes of these? What solutions can you suggest?

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In
a major
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major cities
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cities
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 a lot of
people
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 lose hours of their time each day
due to
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traffic
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jam
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jams
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. The main causes of
this
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 problem are many new
cars
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 and low
quality
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 of
road
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 organisation. One cause of
traffic
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 congestion is increasing the
number
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 of new vehicles. Poor
quality
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 and insufficient quantity of public transport, an increase in the welfare of the
people
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,
as a
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result
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 leads to the fact that
people
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 buy
cars
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. The solution is to improve public transport, to acquire
cars
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 in adequate quantity and set rules. In China,
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,
cars
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 with numbers 1 and 5 can move on the roads on Monday, and on Tuesday – on 2 and 6, on weekends, everyone is allowed to use the roads.
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, in Singapore, they limited the
number
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 of
cars
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 sold and reduced the cost of taxi
fare
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fares
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. Another cause of
this
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 problem is the low
quality
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 of
road
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 organisation. The
number
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 of
cars
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 increases every year, but the
number
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 and width of the
road
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remains
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 the same, so in the central parts, especially in the areas where schools are located, there are frequent
traffic
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 jams. The construction of new additional roads and tunnels will be effective in solving
this
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 problem. In Tokyo,
for instance
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, one of the cities with the highest level of technology development, the situation with
traffic
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 jams is solved by building 5-level interchanges. In
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 most
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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send
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spend
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 their time
in
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on
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 the
road
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due to
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traffic
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 jams. There are several
reason
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reasons
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of
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for
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 it,
main
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the main
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 of them are new
cars
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 and
low
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the low
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quality
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 of
road
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 organisation.

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