Write about the following topic: “Do you think extra-curricular activities are important in a student’s life?” Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Yes
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I agree with the statement that extra-curricular
activities
plays
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crucial
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a crucial
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role in
student
life. In
this
essay
first
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we shall discuss
about
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various reasons why extra-curricular
activities
should be part of
student
life,
then
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and then
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we shall move to its advantages. According to me schools/colleges should not only focus on
accademics
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academics
but
they
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should
also
make space for other extracurricular
activities
like sports, and encourage
then
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them
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to pursue hobbies like singing and dancing. These
activities
not only
helps
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in
students
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students'
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oveall
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overall
development but
also
becomes
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physical exercises.
This
also
removes the
accademic
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academic
stress that
students
facing
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these days.
Moreover
not all
students
will excel in
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academics
academic
different
studnt
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student
is built differently,
they
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and they
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may have different talents, by focusing
of
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extra-curricular
activities
students
can experiment
what
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with what
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they are good at and excel in that fields.
For
example
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Sachin Tendulkar failed in
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the class
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X examination but he excelled in cricket so much that he is called
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of cricket and created many world records in his name. Nobody knows what would have
happend
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happened
happen
if he was forced to study.
This
is only one example in the world there are many examples like these. Schools/colleges should
encorage
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encourage
all
students
to pursue a hobby/interest apart from their
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academics
academic
so
this
will act as a stress bust for them. In
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conclusion
conclussion
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we have discussed how extra-curricular
activities
will help in overall
student
development and
releves
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relieves
students
from
accademic
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academic
stress. We have
also
discussed how every
student
is built differently and need them to find what
are
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actually good at and pursue that talent in their life
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