Rising of traffic on roads has become a deadly problem not only in our country but through out the world .

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traffic
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on roads-it's a big
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for all the countries and for my country too. According to
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problem
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are observed numerous other
problems
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for the
people
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.
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it affected
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the
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work life. A lot of
people
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were late
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their
works
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and it brought some
problems
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in side
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inside
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. Some
people
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lost their jobs, some
people
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had
problems
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with their
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etc. There are big environmental
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also
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beceuse
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because
of
rising
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the rising
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traffic
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. Using of
sovietic
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soviet
cars still
contunied
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continues
in our country.
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This vehicles
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used LPG and it is very
dengerous
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dangerous
.
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on
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in
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traffic
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impacted
also
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people
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's mental health. To stay
on
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in
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traffic
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long
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for long
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hours annoyed everyone. If there are emergency
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situations
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for instance
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fire or road
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accidents
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, health
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problem
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problems
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etc.,
people
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and doctors can not help
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hurt
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peoples
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people
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or cops can not catch guilties.
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rising is that a lot of
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want comfort and they avoid
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public transport. For decreasing of
traffic
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there are would be some strict restrictions. One of them it would be
prohibiden
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prohibited
to use old cars,
second
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of
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them it would rise
amount
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the amount
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of
vehicle's
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tax. In
conclusion
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it's our global
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which influenced our life too.

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