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Rising of traffic on roads has become a deadly problem not only in our country but through out the world .

#traffic #roads #country #world
Rising
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The rising
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of
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traffic
 on roads-it's a big
problem
 for all the countries and for my country too. According to
this
problem
 are observed numerous other
problems
 for the
people
.
For
example
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 it affected
to
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the
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work life. A lot of
people
 were late
to
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for
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 their
works
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work
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 and it brought some
problems
in side
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inside
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. Some
people
 lost their jobs, some
people
 had
problems
 with their
boss
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bosses
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 etc. There are big environmental
problems
also
beceuse
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because
 of
rising
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the rising
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of
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traffic
. Using of
sovietic
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soviet
 cars still
contunied
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continues
 in our country.
This vehicles
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This vehicle
These vehicles
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 used LPG and it is very
dengerous
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dangerous
.
Stay
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Staying
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on
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in
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traffic
 impacted
also
people
's mental health. To stay
on
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in
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traffic
long
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for long
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 hours annoyed everyone. If there are emergency
situation
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situations
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for instance
 fire or road
accident
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accidents
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, health
problem
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problems
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 etc.,
people
 and doctors can not help
hurted
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hurt
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peoples
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people
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 or cops can not catch guilties.
Reason
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The reason
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of
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for
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 rising is that a lot of
people
 want comfort and they avoid
to use
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using
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 public transport. For decreasing of
traffic
 there are would be some strict restrictions. One of them it would be
prohibiden
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prohibited
 to use old cars,
second
of
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them it would rise
amount
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the amount
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 of
vehicle's
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vehicle
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 tax. In
conclusion
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 it's our global
problem
 which influenced our life too.
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