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the changing projections of productions of 06 different sectors (services, manufacturing, materials, energy, agriculture, info-Com Tech) of the world in 2040 and 2060.

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This
 chart illustrates the changing projections of productions of 06 different sectors (services, manufacturing, materials, energy,
agriculture
, info-Com Tech) of the world in 2040 and 2060.
It is clear that
 services represent the largest proportion,
whereas
agriculture
 is undoubtedly the smallest in both years. A majority of the projected
production
 after services will be done by manufacturing which will account for 31% and 33% in 2040 and 2060, respectively.
On the other hand
,
agriculture
 will contribute. 4% of the
production
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 but eventually will reduce up to 1% by 2060. A small fraction of 10% will be accounted
by
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materials
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the materials
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, energy and
agriculture
 sectors.
Although
 7% of
productions
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production
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 in 2040 will be done by the field of energy, it will gradually decrease by 2% in 2060.
However
, it is predicted that
1
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a 1
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% rise in
production
 will be seen in 2060 in the sector of materials in comparison to 2040.
Overall
, within two decades, there will only be a few minor variations in projected
production
 in different sectors and the output is almost similar in both times.
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