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You have been living in a rented apartment for the last two years. Your rental agreement will expire in two months, but you want to extend it for another two years. Write a letter to the agency. In your letter, introduce yourself say why you want to extend the contract mention what changes you would recommend in the contract Write at least 150 words.

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My name is Mahasingh
i
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I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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 am living in
rental
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a rental

The noun phrase rental apartment seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 apartment. Because I am living in
kota
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Kota

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 city,
i
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I

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 am doing my job. Dear sir. So as
to
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apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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i
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I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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 am requesting to you, my rental agreement
expire
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expires

The plural verb expire does not appear to agree with the singular subject my rental agreement. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 in
2months
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2 months

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. Yet please do
this
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,
their
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they're
they are

It appears that the possessive pronoun their should be a contraction instead. Consider changing it.

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 extend for two years. Because I m going to Jaipur, after
2years
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2 years

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my transfer has sure to
japiur
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Jaipur

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While
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 that
am
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been

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb am. Consider changing it.

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 lived in
this
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 place,
This
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 place is very near to my job.
However
Linking Words

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,
who
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whom

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 more money provide to you, and please live me for with. As far as
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I

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 told
to
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apply

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you,
Air
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the Air
an Air

The noun phrase Air conditioner seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 conditioner is not working properly please activate
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

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Whereas
Linking Words

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 sometimes lights are
went
Wrong verb form
gone

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb went. Consider changing it.

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 in their room, please provide to
inverter
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the inverter
an inverter

The noun phrase inverter seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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