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You have been living in a rented apartment for the last two years. Your rental agreement will expire in two months, but you want to extend it for another two years. Write a letter to the agency. In your letter, introduce yourself say why you want to extend the contract mention what changes you would recommend in the contract Write at least 150 words.

#apartment #two #years #agreement #months #agency #contract #changes
My name is Mahasingh
i
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 am living in
rental
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a rental
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 apartment. Because I am living in
kota
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Kota
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 city,
i
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I
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 am doing my job. Dear sir. So as
to
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apply
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i
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I
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 am requesting to you, my rental agreement
expire
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 in
2months
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2 months
. Yet please do
this
,
their
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 extend for two years. Because I m going to Jaipur, after
2years
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2 years
 my transfer has sure to
japiur
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Jaipur
.
While
 that
am
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 lived in
this
 place,
This
 place is very near to my job.
However
,
who
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 more money provide to you, and please live me for with. As far as
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 told
to
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you,
Air
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the Air
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 conditioner is not working properly please activate
this
.
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 sometimes lights are
went
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 in their room, please provide to
inverter
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the inverter
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 for us.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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