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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
#show #percentage #water #purposes #six #areas #world
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The given pie charts illustrate the
percentage
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 of
water
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 used for different purposes in six areas of the world between 6 countries which is North
America
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,
south
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South
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America
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, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia.
Overall
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, the
percentage
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 of
water
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usage
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 varies in the six
country
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countries
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.
The
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Water
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water
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usage
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 for
agricultural
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the agricultural
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purpose
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purposes
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 has the most significant
percentage
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 in all of the six countries which accounted for over
a
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half except in North
America
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 and Europe. These two countries
makes
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 up nearly 50% of the
water
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usage
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 for
industry
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the industry
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. The least
usage
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 of
water
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 is for
domestic
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the domestic
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purpose
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purposes
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 which together accounted for less than 25% in each country. The
percentage
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 of the purpose may vary from the condition and specialization in the country.
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, North
America
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 and Europe tend to have cold and unfertilized land,
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however
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 they have an edge on
industry
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the industry
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,
it
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which
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 leads to
the
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apply
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less
in
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water
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usage
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 for
agricultural
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 yet the biggest
percentage
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 of
water
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 use for industry.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, water, america, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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