In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Currently, the old
citizens
of Britain used to go and live with other old people where they are taken care
by
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nurses.
This
concept of old people living together in an old-age home has gained popularity
due to
the inception of nuclear families. I
opioned
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opined
optioned
opened
that
this
should be granted by the government as it is a costly affair and as
the
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citizen of the
country
, it is the
responsiblity
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responsibility
responsibly
of the authority to pay for it.
Firstly
the primary distinction between developing and developed
country
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countries
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is quality health care services for its
citizens
. As we all witnessed that a developed
country
will look after the
citizens
in their old age.
For example
, countries like Australia and USA
sponser
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sponsor
their citizen's medical
cost
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costs
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.
Hence
, as a part of
developing
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a developing
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country
, it is the duty of the government to look after
their
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citizens
which will lead
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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