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Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than local films. Why is this the case? Should government invest money in local film industry?

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Many
people
 prefer to watch foreign
films
 rather than local
films
. There are many reasons of that. First off all it depends on country where you live.
For example
, I live in Azerbaijan. On my opinion
movies
 here are boring and in Azerbaijani language. I prefer watching
films
 in Russian or English languages.
In addition
 not all
films
 are wonderful and interesting, it means that it
also
 depends on movie.
Moreover
 there are plenty of different types of
films
: horror, comedy, fantasy, fantastic, datective and others.
People
 prefer watching different types of
films
. Not in all countries
films
 are great. Some countries or cities are popular because of
films
, but some countries don’t think about it. I think
movies
 are not too important and it is not necessary for
government
 to develop
movies
.
Instead
this
,
government
 can improve education, health, armies and other important things. But more thing,it would be not bad if
government
 will improve filming.
People
 will probably watch those
movies
 and
government
 will have more popularity. Lots of
people
 may visit
thoose
 counties. There are many famous counties where are spread out
movies
. Examples are : United States of America and Turkey.
People
 love watching there
films
. Maybe it is because
thoose
movies
 are keeping interesting moments that makes
people
 watch
thoose
films
. It can be
also
 because of famous
people
 who take part in
thoose
films
. Usually
people
 love watching
films
 where are there favorite actors or actresses. One more reason is that creators of
movies
 too often buy Reklam that make there film popular. Reklam dare everywhere: on internet,in news, on TV. For many
people
 other
people
’s comments are important and when they see posetive comments, they decide to watch film.
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