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Big salary is more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
There is often debate about if having a big salary is more relevant than
job
satisfaction
.
Although
 the advantages of a big salary are numerous, personally, I completely disagree with the statement given because
job
satisfaction
 provides people with better mental health and more self-esteem. The benefits of good salaries are diverse and improve the wealth of people who earn these amounts of money.
For instance
, if the population earns big salaries, they could face economic problems and they might enjoy their economic level, doing activities, travelling or having lunch in luxurious restaurants without worrying about if they have enough money to afford these expenses. A big income provides people with better living standards and a better quality of life.
However
, the workplace is where citizens spend most of their time. If they do not have
job
satisfaction
, they will get burned, affecting not only the company but
also
 their own families.
In addition
, when workers feel productive, they tend to work more and better.
For example
, if employees have good
job
 conditions with requirements they are able to face,
job
satisfaction
 will be more important than having a big income accompanied by stress or anxiety. For these reasons,
job
satisfaction
 contributes in a major proportion than a big salary.
To conclude
, despite the advantages that big salaries have within,
job
satisfaction
 has a direct impact on people’s mental health, helping them with their daily work and reducing symptoms
such
 as anxiety or stress.
Finally
,
job
satisfaction
 makes employees competent and with good self-esteem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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