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some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a job,others believe that it woulg be better is they go straight to work and gain experience instead. discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In
this
 modern era, people have different views with regard to the question of what is a better
way
 to work whether straight after high school or after gaining a qualification. In my opinion , I strongly believe completing
university
 is better for several reasons. I will discuss in
this
 essay both views and give explanations. On the one hand, having a job directly after school can certainly have some advantages,no one will deny that,
however
,
this
way
 has serious drawbacks that may not suitable for everyone. anyone who will have
this
 job will surely have a small salary and he will be tired of heavy work.
This
 means will have no chance to promote his career or have
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increase
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 in his pay.The companies require the highest qualifications employers who can bring benefits for these companies.
On the other hand
, studying more times and spending more years in
university
 can be hard,but will open a
lot
 of opportunities in the future.Those
students
 will study the skills that teach them how to work in a smart
way
, take advantage of new ideas and move forward in an easy
way
.
University
 gives
students
 the confidence to be leaders and have the power to rule the markets. That
way
 I believe successful people must have a degree to make
a
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 long
way
 short and make of
lot
 steps to bring money and comfortable.
To sum up
, the
university
 is a big gate for
students
 to pass to achieve a
lot
 of huge benefits for the
students
 themself and even for governments, they can be easy to make a
lot
 of achievements.
However
,
students
 who do not finish
university
 are
also
a
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valuable
elements
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 of society that we can not live without them and really they built the future.
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