The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree.

In the recent decade, trends
of
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shopping
has
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been increased exponentially regardless of
people
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backgrounds. But the interesting fact is most of the shopping sales
has
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been carried out
through
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online compare to
offline
regardless of
people
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shopping
it
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from rural or urban areas which in turn causes the shops to be closed permanently. I strongly believe that online shopping will up hand
the
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offline
stores. Earlier, shopping was a resemblance of status showcasing activity by purchasing costly items like electronic gadgets, limited
editions
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goods and
high quality
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clothes etc. But presently
due to
the introduction of online easy
of
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delivery, returning in case
damage
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of damage
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and their attractive offers draws customers to order from their home wherever they
resides
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.
For instance
, a person ordering
the
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items
from
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the
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online
have
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its own perks
compare
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to
offline
stores like
good
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a good
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discount,
lot
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of options,
hassle free
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of exchanging and
also
numerous amount of reviews given by the users helps
the
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other customers in purchasing them.
In addition
to these other trends is been carried out in the way
purchasing
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of purchasing
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the items using gift coupons provided by
the
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companies or friends. The flexibility of using them to purchase them draws the
attentions
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attention
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of buyers to stick
for
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online
compare
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compared
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to
offline
. Where
these kind
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of diversity in purchasing
through
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offline
is missing and it would be
loss
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a loss
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for the sellers if they carry out the business in the same as online sellers
due to
varies
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reason
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reasons
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to mention
few
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a few
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of them would be transportation and workforce.
To conclude
although
offline
stores
gives
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the freedom for the customers to verify the product in place to purchase, it would be better for the same person to undergo several reviews and rating before ordering them
along with
the easiness of exchange
polices
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policies
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and home deliveries.
Therefore
seeing all the benefits of online over
the
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offline
it is guaranteed that one or the other day it would lead shops in towns and cities
to
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be
shutdown
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shut down
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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