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Some people say that the educational success of a student is the result of the work of a good teacher. Others say it depends on the character of the student. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a very debatable issue that the success of an
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 education is given to the tutor and not to the students. In my ,opinion I completely disagree with
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 discuss both points in detail. The foremost important reason is that educators are given the utmost respect in our society as they extract
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the maximum from their learners. Numerous people are under
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 impression that students do get impacted by
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the excellent
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 understanding the basics of finance
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 that whoever determines success is the student by himself. The credit for one's success is one himself only. If a person is not dedicated and motivated to learn something new , any good teacher would not be able to make difference in one's life . To cite an example, Albert Einstein was considered a
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 in his school life as he was not a conventional student but , his love for Science and Maths made him strive more in terms of learning and understanding. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their own merits and demerits but it is an individual who works day and night to avail new heights and without
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 and hard work nothing is possible.
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