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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Nowadays, in the modern world where transnational corporations and government organisations dominated
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the labour market, more and more people are interested in being self-employed.
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 quite obvious drawbacks.
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 two decades corporations have been growing all the
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 and today most of them have
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 number of rules and different regulations, so people who
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 there feel their role in position in these companies smaller and smaller. Some of them lost
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 of their value within a company.
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, they start to make a decision in the favour of
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being
 self-employed, in order to get
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 feeling of freedom of
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what
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 to do and how to
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.
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, in
todays
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today's
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 world much easier to get freelance contracts,
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internet
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 and different platforms for self-employed.
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, I think,
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 ability to
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 for yourself has a lot of disadvantages, which might be hidden for the first
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 for those who consider
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this
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 way. First of all,
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being
 self-employed obliged to spend a lot of
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seaching
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searching
 for new contracts and jobs to be done, thinking about effectiveness, tax returns, and accounting. Which, in turn, left them less
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 for doing their beloved
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. Another drawback of
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 activity is a lack of ability to rely on counterparts or bosses
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 some issues, or even to
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get
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 from them. All the decisions which should be made they should make in most cases by themselves.
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, the
feel
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 of
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freedom
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about what
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 and how to do, and feeling the results and value of somebodies
work
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, forces some employees to resign and become self-employed.
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 it might be seen as a good decision,
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 trend
have
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 disadvantages,
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 as
need
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the need
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 to spend
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 searching for
job
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a job
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 to be done, and
lack
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the lack
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 of ability to rely on counterparts in some issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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