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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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frequent
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 topic of discussion that some
people
 say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is to travel to or work.
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traveling
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 refers to
movement
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the movement
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Frome
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one
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 geographical location to another either for recreation or work.
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 is because
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 all
of
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people
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the people
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 learn new
languages
.
For example
,
traveling
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 is an important
past time
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 activity
that is
 fun and that exposes
people
 to other countries, cultures, and societies.Travellers learn a
lot
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 foreign
languages
,
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 because
traveling
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 necessitates changes in lifestyle and ways of communication.
In addition
 to that,
another
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countries
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languages
 should be to learn
their
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selves .
Moreover
traveling
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 offers
people
 an opportunity to visit interesting places , learn new things, and meet new
people
.
On the other hand
, meeting new
people
 who speak different
languages
.
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Therefore
 some
people
 visit
another countries
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another country
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 for work.
Also
, travellers visit interesting places that have great cultural and historical value . To be
honestly
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, I can say that learning foreign
languages
 less extremely difficult may be.
However
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 learning foreign
languages
 to us .
For
example
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 some
of
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people
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 go to
the
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Russia.Or one of the
way
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ways
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 watching movies in foreign
languages
 helps
to
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people
or
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learn vocabulary . All in all, I believe that
,
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 learning foreign
languages
 helps to ourself
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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