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Some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in suburbs or countryside rather cities To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #traffic #transportation #suburbs #countryside #cities
It has long been argued
that
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whether people should move
in
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 rural areas to avoid gridlocks and to ensure the accessibility of public vehicles or not.
Although
,
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 in long run, it results in excessive
traffic
, industries and pollution in villages, it could be helpful to reduce heavy pressure on highways immediately. Here, the following paragraphs are going to highlight some effective measures to eliminate
traffic
along with
 the benefits and drawbacks of displacement from urban to suburban
region
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regions
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. To start with, resettlement in
suburbs
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area
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 helps to
redistribution
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the redistribution
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 of transportation uses which may eliminate the wastage of time
that is
 occurred when roads are blocked with multiple vehicles
such
 as cars, buses or
lories
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.
For instance
, it is often observed that in cities, people are using the same routes to drive their private cars where other public transports and commercially driven trucks and
lories
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 are running through.
In addition
, private vehicles do not
others
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 and can propose
seat
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to
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two to four people,
it
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 creates high
traffic
 on roads
as well as
 transportation shortage. So, relocation should decrease the disadvantages.
Likewise
, relocating industries and
traffic
 rules should
also
 be taken to deal with the demographic explosion. If the big industries use separate routes or other
medium
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 like
airway
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airways
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 or river routes for shipment, it can
also
 decrease the problem.
Moreover
, strict rules should be imposed to prevent violation of signals on
road
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 and parking in every here and there.
To conclude
, there are multiple causes of
traffic
 in cities which can not solve entirely by promoting recyclement only. Rather government has to implement laws;
Industrialist
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 should come forward.
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