The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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The ratio of elderly people aged 65 or above is expected to change over a hundred-year period, from 1940-2040, and the given line graph captures

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transition in three countries USA, Sweden and Japan. At the beginning of 1940, only 5 out of every 100 Japanese citizens were aged 65 or beyond, but by the end of 1960,

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reduced to 3 and remained the same until the late 1980s after which

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marginal growth was seen till 2000. Meanwhile, between 1940-1960, the percentage of senior citizens slightly increased from 9% to 10% and 7% to 9%, respectively in the USA and Sweden. Both these countries

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showcased a similar steady rise over the next two decades ending with 15% and 14% old age people. In the 21st century, there was a noticeable surge in the proportion of

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, increasing from 15% in 2000 to 20% in 2015, followed by a cool-off period in the subsequent years. During the same duration, America’s elderly

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proportion flattened out

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14%, only to see a gradual growth from the start of 2018.

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, in Japan,

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have ascended steadily since 2000, and it is expected to skyrocket in a space of

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years from 10% in 2030 to 25% in 2035 and 27% in 2040.

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, it is projected that the proportion of old age citizens can surge up to 25% and 23% in USA and Sweden respectively.

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, a generic upward trend is observed in the percentages of

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, and based on the estimates elderly will account for a quarter of the human species in the coming years.

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