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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays and beyond work hours. Many people say that this is a positive development while others say that this is a negative development. Discuss both the viewpoints and give your opinion.

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As cultural
traditions
 are a part of every person's life and there has been a debate among people to use their
traditions
 to attract tourists which indirectly saves their
traditions
.
On the other hand
, others argue
this
 will be causing damage to their customs. I am inclined to the idea of using
culture
 to attract tourism.
To begin
 with, we all live in a social world and everyone is curious of knowing about the
traditions
 that others follow . So, it is a good idea to attract tourists by showing the peculiarities of a
culture
 . In a recent survey conducted by tourism of India, they revealed that many are joyed to travel abroad to India
due to
 its diversified cultural
traditions
.
However
 , using
culture
 for attracting tourists can cause deteriorate its values ,there was a recent incident in a country when a tourist who attended a cultural ceremony started to suddenly film ceremonial participants causing inconvenience to them and causing an event to get disturbed.
Although
 these kinds of incidents are rare. In my opinion, people can pass on cultural values to younger generations and help others to know their cultural values which will strengthen the roots of their
culture
 so making money on cultural tourism is a good idea.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Productivity
  • 2. Urgent matters
  • 3. Prevent potential crises
  • 4. Impact the business
  • 5. Sense of responsibility
  • 6. Dedication
  • 7. Operations
  • 8. Decision-making processes
  • 9. Accessible
  • 10. Flexible work schedule
  • 11. Remote work
  • 12. Work-life balance
  • 13. Availability
  • 14. Employee burnout
  • 15. Stress
  • 16. Mental and physical health
  • 17. Job satisfaction
  • 18. Blur the lines
  • 19. Personal and professional life
  • 20. Disconnect
  • 21. Resentment
  • 22. Morale
  • 23. Valued
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