Many young people move out of their homes to live alone or to live with their friends. Some people think this is a good idea. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days,
people
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are getting close
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their
friends
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more than
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precious
time. Many
people
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believe that
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moving
going
out from home live with
friends
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can be more beneficial rather than living alone. I completely agree and in
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will support my opinion with some examples. First of all, most
of
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the
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people
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don't love to be alone because of the
depession
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depression
and try to move far from it by talking with the nearest
people
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.
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,
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of
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a job
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,
money related
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stress,
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and daily
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pressure can be released by giving the necessary things,emotional attachment and sharing long hours
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of conversation
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conversation
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conversations
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from
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with
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friends
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, relatives or the nearest person. If
people
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wants
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to keep motivated and live with a healthy mind
then
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they should live where
others
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other
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people
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stay.
Secondly
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, why
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agree with
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is
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because anyone can come out
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of
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massive situations. To be more precise,
Daily
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in Daily
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life
people
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may have to face
with
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apply
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many types of problems.Take money
problem
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problems
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,
home
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and home
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crisis
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crises
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for an example. So it can be solved if someone
stay
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arround
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around
him or live with
hime
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him
. I strongly believe that only
friends
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can understand
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in serious situations. But what is
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need to live with some
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.
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On the other hand
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, there are so many
people
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who don't like to be in a group.
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, being
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a friend
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friends
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can create chaotic environments or can be given bad
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influence
.
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, it will
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affect
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on
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apply
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work
like
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.
Usually
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these
people
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want to be alone and use
only
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self
idea
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ideas
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.
Although
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public
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the public
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want
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to ignore the chaotic environment. Doing work full day,
people
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like to
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relax
relaxed
at night time.
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is why they live in some
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areas where
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the population
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is low. In conclusion,
although
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it is a common belief that
people
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who left family and live with
friends
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often
their
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intend to achieve
some thing
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something
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from
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in
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their future life. I believe that
by
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apply
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living with
friends
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will give to them
many
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help in daily life,
work-life
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work life
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, and in
stress
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stressful
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situations .
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