Many young people move out of their homes to live alone or to live with their friends. Some people think this is a good idea. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give examples from your own knowledge or experience.
These days,
people
are getting close with
their Change preposition
to
friends
more than perious
time. Many Correct your spelling
precious
people
believe that moing
out from home live with Correct your spelling
moving
going
friends
can be more beneficial rather than living alone. I completely agree and in this
essay
Add a comma
,essay
i
will support my opinion with some examples.
First of all, most Change the capitalization
I
of
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apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
don't love to be alone because of the depession
and try to move far from it by talking with the nearest Correct your spelling
depression
people
.For example
, lose
of Replace the word
loss
job
, Correct article usage
a job
money related
stress, Add a hyphen
money-related
daily
pressure can be released by giving the necessary things,emotional attachment and sharing long hours Correct word choice
and daily
Change preposition
of conversation
conversation
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conversations
from
Change preposition
with
friends
, relatives or the nearest person. If people
wants
to keep motivated and live with a healthy mind Change the verb form
want
then
they should live where others
Correct pronoun usage
other
people
stay.
Secondly
, why i
agree with Change the capitalization
I
this
is
because anyone can come out Unnecessary verb
apply
from
massive situations. To be more precise, Change preposition
of
Daily
life Change preposition
in Daily
people
may have to face with
many types of problems.Take money Change preposition
apply
problem
, Fix the agreement mistake
problems
home
Correct word choice
and home
crisis
for an example. So it can be solved if someone Fix the agreement mistake
crises
stay
Change the verb form
stays
arround
him or live with Correct your spelling
around
hime
. I strongly believe that only Correct your spelling
him
friends
can understand those problem
in serious situations. But what is Change the determiner
that problem
those problems
more
need to live with some Add a comma
,more
friends
.
Change the punctuation
?
On the other hand
, there are so many people
who don't like to be in a group. For instance
, being a
Correct the article-noun agreement
a friend
friends
friends
can create chaotic environments or can be given bad influnce
. Correct your spelling
influence
As a result
, it will effect
Correct your spelling
affect
on
workChange preposition
apply
like
. Change preposition
apply
Usually
these Add a comma
,Usually
people
want to be alone and use only
self Add an article
the only
idea
.Fix the agreement mistake
ideas
Although
public
Correct article usage
the public
want
to ignore the chaotic environment. Doing work full day, Change the verb form
wants
people
like to relexed
at night time. Correct your spelling
relax
relaxed
This
is why they live in some noise free
areas where Add a hyphen
noise-free
population
is low.
In conclusion, Add an article
the population
although
it is a common belief that people
who left family and live with friends
often their
intend to achieve Correct pronoun usage
apply
some thing
Correct your spelling
something
from
their future life. I believe that Change preposition
in
by
living with Change preposition
apply
friends
will give to them many
help in daily life, Replace the quantifier
much
work-life
, and in Correct your spelling
work life
stress
situations .Replace the word
stressful
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