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Many young people move out of their homes to live alone or to live with their friends. Some people think this is a good idea. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #move #homes #friends #idea
These days,
people
 are getting close
with
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to
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 their
friends
 more than
perious
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precious
 time. Many
people
 believe that
moing
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moving
going
 out from home live with
friends
 can be more beneficial rather than living alone. I completely agree and in
this
essay
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i
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I
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 will support my opinion with some examples. First of all, most
of
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the
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people
 don't love to be alone because of the
depession
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depression
 and try to move far from it by talking with the nearest
people
.
For example
,
lose
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loss
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 of
job
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a job
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,
money related
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money-related
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 stress,
daily
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and daily
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 pressure can be released by giving the necessary things,emotional attachment and sharing long hours
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of conversation
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conversation
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conversations
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from
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with
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friends
, relatives or the nearest person. If
people
wants
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want
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 to keep motivated and live with a healthy mind
then
 they should live where
others
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other
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people
 stay.
Secondly
, why
i
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I
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 agree with
this
is
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because anyone can come out
from
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of
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 massive situations. To be more precise,
Daily
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in Daily
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 life
people
 may have to face
with
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many types of problems.Take money
problem
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problems
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,
home
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and home
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crisis
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crises
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 for an example. So it can be solved if someone
stay
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stays
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arround
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around
 him or live with
hime
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him
. I strongly believe that only
friends
 can understand
those problem
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that problem
those problems
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 in serious situations. But what is
more
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,more
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 need to live with some
friends
.
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?
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On the other hand
, there are so many
people
 who don't like to be in a group.
For instance
, being
a
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a friend
friends
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friends
 can create chaotic environments or can be given bad
influnce
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influence
.
As a result
, it will
effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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work
like
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.
Usually
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,Usually
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 these
people
 want to be alone and use
only
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the only
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 self
idea
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ideas
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.
Although
public
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the public
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want
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wants
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 to ignore the chaotic environment. Doing work full day,
people
 like to
relexed
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relax
relaxed
 at night time.
This
 is why they live in some
noise free
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noise-free
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 areas where
population
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the population
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 is low. In conclusion,
although
 it is a common belief that
people
 who left family and live with
friends
 often
their
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apply
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intend to achieve
some thing
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something
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from
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in
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 their future life. I believe that
by
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apply
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living with
friends
 will give to them
many
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much
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 help in daily life,
work-life
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work life
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, and in
stress
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stressful
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 situations .
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