A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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and possession of materials. Honour, kindness and trust no longer seem important. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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paragraphs with a suitable conclusion. Supporting my agreement with the given statement, I firmly believe that people nowadays look into social status and material possessions. To cite an example, if you own a Mercedes or BMW over a smaller car, even some police officers would treat you respectfully.
Moreover
, if you are holding a higher social status, the respect you get is comparatively high.
For instance
, if you are a bank manager, you would get many opportunities to go front in a queue.
On the other hand
, if you are a teacher who did a
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marvellous
job in educating children will not have the same chance. Current society has practised
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matirial-oriented
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material-oriented
mindset over humanity. Explaining some of another supporting
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in favour of
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statement, it is true that kindness/trust or honour not matters any longer.
As a
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people who had
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great
reputations
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back there are now old, and will not be treated the same as others. As an example, the principal of a school who did major social service to the entire society doesn't get even a seat on the bus. But imagine if a politician got into the same bus, he will get a seat immediately. In conclusion, a
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worth is measured
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the status he/she has or the materials that person owns despite the honour, trust or kindness. I believe that the aforementioned points are strongly supporting my viewpoint
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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