ome people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

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university or college to fulfil their dreams by getting respectful job opportunities. Where
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a few
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believed that after completing
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environment. In my,
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well qualification is necessary for
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better future and
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career.
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leads to a logical conclusion. Commencing, in modern times, the population size has highly surged which causes competition between individuals
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, the best route
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better
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life
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is to have a higher education because
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always seek knowledge and educational certificates.
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, in India, an enormous number of
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aspirants
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colleges because it is believed that a better job can only be achieved when
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have a perfect amount of knowledge and bachelor's qualification. Moving
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, some people think that they can directly indulge themselves in better jobs
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in the contemporary ,era monetary
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wealth
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of humans.
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, students after completing
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school
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learnings
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choose to work and to complete their needs in
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school passed out
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candidates
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to get
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and earn money which would be helpful to them in living
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life
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. In a nutshell, higher educational knowledge is necessary because
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technological
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by the technical person.
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,
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school
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work not
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useful to survive in the world.
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are crucial to
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earn
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