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Some people think that the government should ban dangerous sports activities, but others think that people should have the freedom to choose sports activities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
 believe that the
government
 ought to forbid threatening
sports
activities
,
while
 others claim that individuals should have their own choices about
sports
activities
. I strongly believe that the second opinion why I am going to explain with reasons. Primarily, human is
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only alive who is sociable that can decide about matters by thinking of results and freedom is one of the important matter that can not control by authority. If
government
 ban dangerous
sports
activities
, those
activities
 can continue in illegal ways and can be more dangerous than ever.
For example
, if paragliding is going forbidden by the
government
,
people
 are going to do that anyhow and will be more dangerous since there will be no control over it.
Moreover
, the society who like those types of
sports
 has known already what the risk is . But extreme
sports
 are mainly
people
's own choices and they do not hurt anybody else and go inside
of
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their privilege.
For
this
 reason,
that
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the
government
 has no right to restrict those
people
's freedom.
Instead
 of restricting
this
 population, the
government
 could restrict those kinds of
activities
places
 by rules.
For instance
, those sorts of
places
 can be
further
 controlled and monitored to see if the necessary precautions are taken. If those
places
 fail to do, so may result in severe sanctions. Another example is that the
government
 force those sorts of
places
 to warn
people
 about all dangers that they are going to face. They can have a signature on the letter about dangerous and health problems which they are going to face during sport or after sport. In conclusion, the
government
 should not restrict those
people
's freedom who like to do extreme
sports
, yet the
government
 can make provisions against risks with cooperation by those kinds of activity
places
 to minimize risks.
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