In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, the number of
fast-
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the fast-food

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food
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outlet
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has widely spread throughout the world and
on
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several cases,
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citizens prefer consuming
junk-
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junk food

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food
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to classic cuisine. I sit on the fence about
this
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kind of issue, since there are numerous benefits,
although
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some drawbacks still need to be considered. Having
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a bunch

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of
food
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stores might simplify and
saving
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save

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our
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us

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time
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to eat
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eating

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. No doubt that preparing meal was become one of the complex activities, especially for office workers
in
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apply

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the
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downtown.
Fast-
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Fast food

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food
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, which can
be serve
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be served

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without taking
much
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many

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efforts
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effort

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to finish, could become one of the solutions.
Furthermore
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, choosing it
instead
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of traditional
food
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will save
time
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either for serving
and
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or

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consuming. Junk
food
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such
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as burgers or fried
chickens
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chicken

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are
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is

The plural verb are does not appear to agree with the singular subject food. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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designed to be eaten easily,
hence
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will helpfully save
the
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time
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.
On the other hand
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, over-consuming fast
food
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will lead
into
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several unhealing
disease
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diseases

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in long term,
such
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as cancer or obesity.
Lengthy
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The lengthy
A lengthy

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process of making fried fries,
for example
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, made
it
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them

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contain
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contains

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harmful content for people who
consume
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themconsume

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.
Additional
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An additional
The additional

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chemical
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chemicals

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which
keep
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keeps

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the substance more durable
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also
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had
its
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their

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responsible
in
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spreading potential sickness. Equally important, replacing traditional cuisine will bring the negligence of heritage. Especially for young people, who prefer
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eat
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eating

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a burger
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burger
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burgers

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to
home-made
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a home-made
the home-made

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meal
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meals

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, if
this
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cycle happened continually, it might affect
the
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traditional
food
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’s existence in the future.
For instance
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,
in
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apply

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several
city
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cities

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in Indonesia has lost
its
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local
food
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due to
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this
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kind of issue. All in all, fast
food
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are sure
giving
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benefits
in
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some extent,
such
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as
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practical
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practicality

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to
serve
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service

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and
efficient
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efficiency

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in
time
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usage,
however
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too much
relying
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reliance

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on it will emerge numerous drawbacks, like health issues and
culture
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cultural

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loss.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Impact
  • Nutritious
  • Cultural heritage
  • Identity
  • Economic implications
  • Locally sourced
  • Social cohesion
  • Environmental degradation
  • Obesity
  • Heart diseases
  • Diabetes
  • Cultural transmission
  • Convenience
  • Traditional dishes
  • Biodiversity
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