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Destination of Anthropology graduates and their salaries after 5 years' work.

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’ employment status are depicted in the pie chart, and their salaries were estimated after five years of working in the table.
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, more than half of
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 chose full-time jobs.
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, the same proportion of them earned the maximum money as government members
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 of freelance consultants and working for private companies. At the outset, full-time work was chosen by 52% of the total.
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, part-time work option was occupied by 15% of Anthropology
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, 12% of the proportion illustrates unemployed
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, both full-time postgraduate study and unknown status are allocated 8% to themselves separately. The
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 who worked part-time and studied at the same time were just 5%. Looking at the table, 50% of subjects who worked for the government took $100,000. 40% of freelancers and 30% of private companies employees’ incomes were evaluated at the same number.
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, just 5% of freelancers’ and government sectors’ revenues were $25,000-49,000 as the minimum salary. Though, 10% of private company workers received the same amount.
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