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The major contributing factor to
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related diseases, typified by diabetes, high blood pressure and heart disease, is often obesity.
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, we have to think about losing surplus
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. When I was watching TV the other day, I found a program which tried to introduce a
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to cook low-calorie dishes. It showed
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images
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for a full hour.
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they let 3 overweight guests eat 3 full servings of
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(
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curry with rice). The dishes were made with lower calories than normal but that “tasting”
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1,800 kcal. If you have a chance to visit
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America, in which many people are struggling to lose excess
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, try watching TV. You will find it is filled with
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commercials and medicines that are supposed to help you lose fat.
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, the best
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to lose
weight
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is not by eating
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food
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, but by reducing the amount of
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you eat. It is really difficult to reduce your meal portion sizes
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surrounded by actual
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or
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of
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on TV-- unless you have an
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strong will. So, it is very important to keep away from
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toxic
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environment
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.
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avoiding
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advertising
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is still not enough. Because if you
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want to lose
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, changing your physical
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is not be
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enough. What is most important is to keep your mental
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free of unhealthy
food
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images
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.
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is important for all of us. We have to find a
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to shift our mental focus from
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to healthier foci
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as sports, reading or music. Perhaps
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of calling them “
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related diseases” we should Lifestyle Diseases call them “
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diseases”, for thought and emotion are the true root causes of these diseases. If we are always worried and anxious we may eat as an outlet for these feelings. If we constantly think of failure and problems, we may eat as a
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to distract ourselves from these thoughts.
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, it is our negative thoughts and emotions, and our
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way
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of dealing with them,
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the true cause of obesity and “
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diseases”. So our challenge is to shift our thoughts and emotions-- and to
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the negative ones in a better
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.
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to lose
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and gain health. We can enjoy the satisfaction of finishing a really fat book. We can enjoy the achievement of passing a difficult exam. We can enjoy the exertion and effort of sports. Of course, we can enumerate many more positive pursuits. The point is,
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our mental focus is the key. There are many ways to cultivate a healthy mental
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. We don’t even have to wait. Today, or tomorrow, we can start to think in a different
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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