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You’ve had a class discussion about the importance of friendship. Your teacher has asked you to write an essay about why it is important to have friends giving reasons for your opinion.

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Nowadays, It is so important to have friends who can be there for you when you need them the most, but It is hard to get good
friendship
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friendships
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. First of all, I think when we have
good
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a good
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 friendship, we can achieve a lot, because It is easier for us when you have that
friend
 to help you in every situation.
The
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A
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 real
friend
 will give you the courage to do something you think you can"t. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 the most important thing in
the
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a
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 friendship is to tell your
friend
 what the situation is, not what you want to hear. A real
friend
 is always gonna tell you what you don"t want to hear,
cause
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because
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 he"s real with you.
In addition
, It is very difficult to find someone to be with you in the hard times and
that is
 the problem with so many people. They can not find real friends and it
cause
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causes
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 them to loneliness.
To sum up
, I believe that It is one of the most important things in our lives to have good friendships. I think that can help us a lot and we have to try to keep them with us because
It"s
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 more expensive than gold.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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