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you recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. the weather was very unusal and the heating/cooling system in the hotel was inadequate

#hotel #city #weather #system
Dear Mr Smith, I am writing to you to
complaint
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complain
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 about problems which
is
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are
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happened
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happening
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 with your heating system in
hotel
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the hotel
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. Especially in the cold weather. When I started to live here, the room was cold because of
bad
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the bad
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 quality of
heating
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the heating
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 system. There was
problem
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a problem
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 with
heating
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the heating
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 system because of
cold
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the cold
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 weather
water
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the water
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 was frozen. At
first
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,first
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 I am trying to solve
problem
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the problem
a problem
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 without informing you by
turn
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turning
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 on
stove
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the stove
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 but it did not help me. Because stove
also
 was damaged. I am kindly asking
from
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you correct
mistakes
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the mistakes
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 which
makes
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make
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difficult
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it difficult
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 for living.
However
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,However
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 I require
compensation
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a compensation
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 amount of 15% for the inconvenience. If you do not solve
problem
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a problem
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 during the day I should leave the hotel by returning my money. I am looking forward to your answer.
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Yours
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Your
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 faithfully, George
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