Some organization believe that their employees dess smartly. Others value quality of works above appearance Discuss boh these views and give your own opinion.

Handful individuals believe that their workers should dress smartly.
However
, others argue that
quality
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the quality
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of the
work
should be better than their
clothes
. So, in my
opinion
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quality
of the
work
the
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is the
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most important for everybody. On the one hand, wearing
uniforms
is good
especially
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for
the
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apply
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big
companies
. Wearing
uniforms
is good for the big company because they
are
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show the company`s discipline.
However
,
employees
can wear attractive
clothes
and it can disturb somebody and it can be cause for decreasing
work
quality
.
For example
, recently
from
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on
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TV
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a TV
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program I have seen that one of the big
companies
of
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in
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the USA allowed to their workers what they want to wear and after that
work
quality
decreased
for
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by
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15% because some
woman
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women
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wear attractive
clothes
and it was
reason
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the reason
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for disturbing others.
On the other hand
, wearing
uniforms
is bad for the company. Wearing
uniforms
is bad because it is
little
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a little
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bit uncomfortable and boring. Some people feel
their
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apply
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better
by
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in
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their
clothes
because if individuals wear their
favorite
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favourite
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clothes
they feel better and it can be
reason
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a reason
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increasing
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for increasing
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work
productivity.
For instance
, recently
form
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from
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magazine
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a magazine
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called «Time» I
red
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read
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that some employers allow to their
employees
wear their
favorite
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favourite
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clothes
and after that
work
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productivity increased
27.5
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by 27.5
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% than
companies
which
is
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are
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require
uniforms
from their
employees
. Taking everything into consideration, I think that employers should allow
to
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apply
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their
employees
to wear their
favorite
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favourite
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clothes
but there should be
limit
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the limit
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. It means that
companies
should set up rules about
clothes
.
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