Some organization believe that their employees dess smartly. Others value quality of works above appearance Discuss boh these views and give your own opinion.

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Handful individuals believe that their workers should dress smartly.
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, others argue that
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quality
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the quality
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of the
work
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should be better than their
clothes
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. So, in my
opinion
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quality
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of the
work
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the
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is the
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most important for everybody. On the one hand, wearing
uniforms
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is good
especially
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for
the
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apply
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big
companies
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. Wearing
uniforms
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is good for the big company because they
are
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apply
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show the company`s discipline.
However
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,
employees
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can wear attractive
clothes
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and it can disturb somebody and it can be cause for decreasing
work
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quality
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.
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, recently
from
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on
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TV
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a TV
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program I have seen that one of the big
companies
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of
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in
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the USA allowed to their workers what they want to wear and after that
work
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quality
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decreased
for
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by
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15% because some
woman
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women
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wear attractive
clothes
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and it was
reason
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the reason
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for disturbing others.
On the other hand
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, wearing
uniforms
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is bad for the company. Wearing
uniforms
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is bad because it is
little
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a little
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bit uncomfortable and boring. Some people feel
their
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apply
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better
by
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in
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their
clothes
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because if individuals wear their
favorite
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favourite
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clothes
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they feel better and it can be
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a reason
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increasing
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for increasing
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work
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productivity.
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, recently
form
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from
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magazine
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a magazine
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called «Time» I
red
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read
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that some employers allow to their
employees
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wear their
favorite
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favourite
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clothes
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and after that
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work
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productivity increased
27.5
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by 27.5
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% than
companies
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which
is
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are
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require
uniforms
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from their
employees
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. Taking everything into consideration, I think that employers should allow
to
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apply
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their
employees
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to wear their
favorite
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favourite
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clothes
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but there should be
limit
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the limit
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. It means that
companies
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should set up rules about
clothes
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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